Competition: Unforgettable

Finished
Unforgettable

There are events in our lives that influence us to so great extent that we are not able to forget them. Your task is to describe such an event from the past of your character and to determine, whether your character would like to remember it for the rest of the life or your character would rather have forgotten it.

Minimum 500 words. The entries will be judged according to the Voice Fiction Grading Rubric. All participants will receive Clusters of Ice for your entries.

Competition Information
Organized by
Adept Xantros
Running time
2016-06-28 until 2016-07-17 (20 days)
Target Unit
Clan Odan-Urr
Competition Type
Fiction
Awards
Third Level Crescents and Clusters of Ice as per VOICE guidelines
Participants
9 subscribers, of which 5 have participated.
Results
1st place
Uun Suu
Member
Uun Suu
Submission
Uun Suu opted out of publishing her submission.
Placement
1st place
2nd place
Ryan Hawkins
Member
Ryan Hawkins
Submission
Ryan Hawkins opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
2nd place
Member
Aerwin Tribwell-Urr
Textual submission

Fresh start
Aerwin Tribwell
10057

Rain poured down on the capital city Menat Ombo. It had been rather stormy day and the Jedi Kaira Rohana had been out on a Training run with some very green new recruits. She was tired, cold and very wet by the time she walked into one of her favorite cantina. The place was small, dark and had little going on. In fact there was only two other customers in the whole place. Kaira often came here after long days for this very reason. It was clean and had great food but no one really knew about the place and Kaira was glad for that. Something however happened that Kaira had never expected to happen that day.

In the corner in a small booth sat a young woman who looked lost. Kaira had seen that look so many times on the young Jedi she had trained over the years. There lost in her own world sat a Jedi who had yet to be formally trained. This was a surprise for Kaira knew all the recruits for Odan-Urr always came right to the training halls. Who was she and why had she not reported to Odan-Urr.

Aerwin had come into this cantina looking for work. They had said she could work three days a week as a dish washer in back. Today would be a trial run and she had just sat down to eat a bowl of soup when the door opened. She saw the hooded figure of a woman who looked like she had been out in the storm for hours. The water seem to just pour off her cloak to pool on the floor at her feet.

From behind the bar the owner looked at the woman with a sharp sly smile that hid a lot she was sure. “Kaira, long time no see. How you been girl?”

The way the guy look at Kaira said that they had known each other for a while now. “Busy and I am glad to see you are still doing so well for your self Gourton.” With a robust laugh that echoed off the walls Kaira sat down at the bar.

“Now ain’t that the truth. I was just telling my new dishwasher over there that this planet is way too busy lately and I just might need to pack up and leave.”

“You would do well to think of doing just that Gourton. This are changing and I don’t see it ending well for this planet or the people here. If you have a place to go I would go.”

With this the man looked Kaira up and down with a prying eye for answers. The Jedi gave him no more answers. He just laughed once more. “I will think about this and you might be out a quiet placed.”

“Who is this new dishwasher?” Gourton then pointed to Aerwin.

The Odan-Urr Jedi stood once more then turned and walked to the table that Aerwin sat at.
“May I join you?” She asked in a very gentaly voice that rang with command.

“You may but there is no need to use the force to make me do it. Yes I know all about the force and the Jedi.” The way Aewrin said that made Kaira pause for a moment.

“I feel that you are more then what I see in front of me. Share your story with me young one. Maybe just maybe you won’t need to wash dishes here.”

Something in the body language of Kaira told Aerwin that she could share anything and the woman would keep her secrets. Over the next hour Aewrin shared her past history and only once did Kaira stop her. It was at the end of her story about her sister’s death. Kaira felt the sorrow that the woman felt over this event. If she did not forgive herself she would at some point be drawn to the dark side but if she knew how to protect against that she would become a great Jedi someday.

“Well Aerwin, I wish to train you but not in a way you think. You will come to my small home. There you will take care of my young child. In return I will train you as a Jedi. No one will know about you or the child but me. She will need extra care do to the fact that she is a Jedi as well. Will you do this?”

Aerwin sat back and closed her eyes. This was a lot to think about it would change her life forever. In the next moment she could have a new life one where she could protect and sever rather than be unsure if she would cause the death of someone else. “I will.”

That was when Aerwin became who she is today. She trained and learned all she could from Kaira. It was a quiet time with little trouble for Aerwin. This was the begin for Aerwin but the end for Kaira. Soon Aerwin was where Kaira was but Kaira was gone this was where it started with a simple storm and a need for good food.

Placement
3rd place
4th place
Corvus Corax
Member
Corvus Corax
File submission
Unforgettable.docx
Placement
4th place
Member
Privateer Tyraal Bitshiver
File submission
DJB_writing_prompts.doc
Textual submission

The event in the attached takes place in Tyraal's future from present. I wanted to mesh J.J. Abrams' new star wars with the formerly canon Star Wars universe from previously. And I did the best that I could.

The Force be with you.

Placement
5th place