Competition: The Holocron Heist

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The Holocron Heist

You have been paired up to smugglers who have come across a rare holocron form the Old Republic. Rumor has it that it is one that has a piece of the great Star Map hidden in the Old Jedi Temple on Coruscant. You have been challenged to steal it without getting caught. Your mission is to get in past the heavily armed security and retrieve the item and bring it to a cargfreighter where you will get on board for the next part. This will be a three part competition. After each submission your scores will be tallied and the winner will be judged accordingly. There must be a minimum of 500 words for this comp. Judging will be based on character development, details, grammar, and story. At the end of each time frame the next section will start up. Please have fun with all this and remember there will be twists and turns.

Competition Information
Organized by
Kristeva, Scarlet Agna
Running time
2016-01-25 until 2016-02-05 (12 days)
Target Unit
Clan Naga Sadow
Competition Type
Fiction
Awards
Third Level Crescents
Participants
2 subscribers, of which 2 have participated.
Results
Member
Adept Bentre Stahoes
File submission
Never_As_Easy_As_It_Looks_In_the_Holovids_14185.pdf
Textual submission

I tried to reflect the new-canon a bit in my portrayal of this heist. I mean, some of my observations might seem a little too liberal, but I figured a bunch of Jedi investigating and protecting these finds would present more of a challenge and a more interesting story than merely liberating such treasures from some mooks.

Placement
1st place
2nd place
Quo-Wing-Tzun
Member
Quo-Wing-Tzun
File submission
Double.doc
Placement
2nd place