[GJWXII: Retribution] Chapter 4 - Strike


[GJWXII: Retribution] Chapter 4 - Strike




Nancora Space
On board the Skylla
Collective Flagship

Captain Sul Pahlee studied the battle against the combined strength of the Brotherhood’s Clans with a fist clenched at his side.

Despite Rath’s careful planning and all the traps they had laid, the Brotherhood was more coordinated than they had anticipated. While the Clans did not move as one cohesive force–or anything resembling an organized singular fleet for that matter–they were not firing on one another. In their own disparate ways, each Clan fleet was focusing efforts on punching through the Collective’s defensive formation around Nancora’s orbit. No single Clan seemed to be responsible for the successful strike, but whatever loose temporary allegiance they had formed he was sure would not last for long.

Indeed. Sul had no doubt that once the dust settled, there would be dissent among the Clan’s. Fingers would be pointed, and they would quickly fall back on their petty squabbles. This was why Sul Pahlee had defected from the Iron Navy to follow Rath. The Collective was everything that the Brotherhood could become, if only they could unite and rally behind a singular vision and purpose. That was a topic for another day, however.

Captain Pahlee had more pressing matters at hand. The Braga had been destroyed. Brotherhood forces managed to infiltrate modified heavy cruiser and disabled it’s prototype systems. With the powercore overloaded, it had burst into a brilliant cloud of fire and shrapnel, taking out two other cruisers in Battle Group Abellio.

Just like that, years of careful research and development were suddenly gone. The engineers, of course, had insisted on seeing their work in action, so there was no telling how many of those minds were now floating uselessly in the void. Pahlee did not know their names, really. He did not know all of their families. But he knew that Rath Oligard did. Pahlee felt a tinge of pride knowing that after it was all over, Rath would take the time to acknowledge each of the affected families. Personally. It was just another one of the many reasons Pahlee trusted Rath and believed so feverently in his cause.

“Captain: enemy ships are breaking through our blockade and proceeding towards the surface,” a tactical officer called out across the bridge.

“Understood,” Pahlee nodded once to himself as his mind churned mechanically through battle logistics. “Lieutenant: inform the Supreme Leader and alert General Diss’are to prepare the ground forces. ” The Zabrak captain’s eyes flicked towards the readouts to his left. “Have the Caladi and Kamea cover the Jamai. We can’t lose another prototype like that.” Pahlee made a decisive chopping motion with his hand for emphasis.

“And what of the remaining ships?” the officer called back.

“Show them what a true navy looks like,” Captain Pahlee replied cooly. The crew responded with a unified verbal salute of solidarity.


The Brotherhood has struck back at the Collective and is making a push for capital city of Axio. Click here to read the full update!

Written by: Marick Tyris


Phase II - Go

Phase II is in full swing. See the Grand Master’s latest news post as a primer.

Phase II - Fiction

Fiction - Survival - This a really unique event. The prompt is a Scenario, which means there is a bit more structure than a typical prompt would have. I left a few things open ended, and tried to allow for as much flexibility and creativity as possible for you as writers. If you have any questions at all please let me know.

I will reiterate the Special Condition for this event:

The winning entry in this competition will have the chance (at the author's discretion) to become the survivor that becomes canonized as part of the Great Jedi War XII: Retribution official storyline!

Basically, this means that even though all of you are writing for the same prompt, the winning entry (with the authors permission of course) will get added to the GJWXII storyline and become a part of DB Canon history :).

Event Long Events

Combat Writing Prompt - These are being graded by the Combat Master, and serve as an easy way to earn participation credit for members that aren't ACC Qualified or weren't able to get in on the Phase I ACC Ladder!

Run-On - If you're having problems forming a team, contact your Clan Summit. 2-person teams are eligible to garner participation credit, they just wont' be able to place.

Wally's Run-On tips:
  1. Half the event is already over. Do not leave everything to the last day. Trust me.
  2. Each member needs to post three (3) times to qualify. Remember that the minimum word requirement per post is 250 words. So, instead of stressing too much on making everything work perfectly in the opening posts, focus on shorter posts to make sure everyone is able to get their three posts in. Just one of many approaches to doing a team writing event like this.
  3. Back and forth transitions between writers is the fun, unique part of ROs. Make sure you are having fun, and don't stress so much on planning/outlines. Otherwise you never start, or start late, and end up rushing your outline.
  4. Have fun. ROs are really unique and even if you don't win, they are where I personally have drawn a lot of character development from. It was a cross-unit RO where I first met Atra, actually. I won't forget it, and it probably lead to our long term friendship as peers and leaders in the club.

Any updates or news posts that we make are being recorded and tracked here on the wiki for transparency. This includes things like event detail changes and other administrative changes that happen in real-time and we are deploying hot-fixes for.

  • Read the plot updates for GJWXII: Retribution here.
  • To follow the events of the Twelfth Great Jedi War, please see the Wikipedia article.
  • For information on The Collective, please see the Wikipedia page here.
  • For more information on the Collective, also see the Faction Page.
  • For information on the Collective stronghold where the War is taking place, see the Nancora wiki article.
  • To get caught up on the story arcs and current fictional climate of the Dark Brotherhood, please see the Fiction Center

Final Words

If you guys have any questions, the Dark Council is here to answer your questions. We had some really amazing turnouts for events in Phase I. I personally was shocked to get 80 fiction entires. I've read through over half of them and am very proud of our society in terms of quality and execution. Please make me drown in more fictions. Nothing makes me happier, and as usual if you have questions please, please let me know. I’m excited to see what you guys can bring to the table for the next round.

Show us what you got.


Most exciting. I like the bit with the Survival comp xD

I think this is going to be one amazing second phase. I really enjoy seeing some of the new challenges ahead.

Soooo excited!!!

The bleeps, the creeps and sweeps, you say? ;)


Welp, let's get out of this message and go back to stabbing eachother's backsides.

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