Celevon took a deep breath of the polluted air of the Smuggler’s Moon, his mercurial eyes still flashing around as he subconsciously searched for possible enemies. Two weeks prior, their leave after the war had ended with no sign of the Quaestor. For the first several days, the members of the Arconan Summit awaited word of the Templar’s return with a lecture on their lips. More days passed with no word from the former Jedi and they began to suspect the worst.
Then, contacts within the Dajorra Intelligence Agency had a list of reported sighting of Sorenn frequenting dive bars and shady establishments on Nar Shaddaa.
The newest leader of Apex Brigade had wanted to seek out the AWOL Quaestor immediately. It was, however, not to be. She had been forcefully returned to the medical clinic to have the cybernetic replacement eye further calibrated and tested.
In order to placate the Sephi, the Onderonian had agreed to seek out and return the former Knight-Commander to Arconan space at any cost.
The Shadicar closed his eyes and extended his senses, hoping to find some vague impression of the Templar’s Force Presence. The chaos of the planet itself pushed at Celevon’s senses, the screams and suffering of those who had fought and clawed to survive the harsh environment enveloping him. Edraven sighed and rubbed at his right temple, the material of the gloves cool on his skin as his trenchcoat rippled with the motion.
“Of course it won’t be easy,” the Prelate muttered to himself as his senses returned to their normal area.
“When is it ever easy?”
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The Onderonian strode through the winding streets, each step silent as the bottom of his trenchcoat billowed with his carefully measured motions. Many of the civilians and thugs stiffened or outright moved out of his path as the uneasy sensation the Arconan gave off flowed over them. Their primal instincts screamed for them to flee as he drew closer.
Whether he wanted to or not, Celevon gave off an air that spoke of the untold number of lives he had taken. The Human was dangerous. A predator.
To all appearances, the Aedile was unarmed save for the hilt of a katana that hung over his right shoulder. He knew where each weapon on his person was located: from the katana across his back, to the kerambit in the inverted sheath on his lower back. Even the lightsaber in a holster secured beneath the saya, though that would only be drawn as a last resort.
The Obelisk felt eyes on his back and stopped in his tracks, slowly swivelling his head in that direction, eyes like molten silver locking on a blue-skinned Twi’lek. When the male began backing away, Celevon’s lips curved into a small smirk. He moved again, each step taking him ever closer to one of the locations where the Quaestor had been reported to frequent.
As the Prelate drew nearer, the sounds of fighting reached his ears from a nearby alleyway. He planned to ignore the situation; he was no hero, after all.
The Onderonian’s eyes widened slightly as he felt the presence of his quarry emanating from that direction. He broke into a run towards the sound, leaping and sliding over obstacles rather than moving around them.
Celevon skidded to a halt as he came upon the older Human facing off against multiple opponents. The fact that Sorenn was surrounded by what appeared to be gang members wasn’t what had caused him pause. No, it was the appearance of the normally well-groomed Ex-Gangster that did so.
Turel’s face was unshaven and had grown a small beard. His typically short, military-style hair had grown to where it nearly fell into his eyes.
Absently, the Onderonian realized they were behind a nightclub if the thrumming bass of the music was anything to go by.
The Quaestor moved swiftly, sliding within the punches and taking advantage of the opponent’s momentum to cause them to stumble when he didn’t drop down gripping the arm, tossing one over his shoulder.
The Shadicar shook off the slight shock and leapt into the fray. His first target was quickly chosen by the slightly familiar firearm in his grasp, holding the revolver loosely in a tattooed hand. A deft motion had Celevon’s gloved hand tightening around the forearm of the Humanoid, hyperextending the elbow against his body as his other hand tightened in the flaxen hair, a sharp jerk pulling the head back.
Stunned and pained brown eyes locked with silver before Celevon took note of one of the thugs turning towards them. A tight squeeze of the forearm within his right hand on the cluster of nerves caused the tattooed hand to reflexively close.
BANG!
Or, at least as much as one was able with a .48 caliber revolver in their hand. It went off, striking the other gang member in the stomach. Turel and the other gang members froze, turning towards the location of the sound.
Reaching out with the Force, Celevon sent as simple a message as he could. ‘Turel. Catch!’
The Onderonian released the forearm he held and ripped the firearm free, tossing it to his Quaestor. Once the weapon was free of his hands, Edraven jerked harder on the hair gripped in his left. The already off-balance Humanoid began falling backwards.
Celevon spun, moving so swiftly his form almost blurred as he caught the jaw of the tattooed gangster in the open palm of his right hand and pushed to the side. Gravity took care of the rest. A harsh snap was audible over the thrum of the bass as the Humanoid landed, his neck broken.
Turel snatched the grip of his Enforcer Pistol from the air, continuing the motion as he swung it sharply around. The cylinder and barrel struck the side of the head of the gang member nearest the former Knight-Commander, sending him to the ground with grunt. The Templar placed his finger on the trigger, aiming the barrel straight at the forehead of the next thug, who froze in his tracks.
I was going to call you out for having a 0 in Intimidation, but then saw the Unsettling Presence Feat. Good use of it.
repetition department.
This is the first part of your post where I had to stop and scratch my head. The actions don't make sense to me, here, and how they relate to Celevon knowing one of the locations the Quaestor had been reported to frequent.
Shaky action, here. Sliding within what punches? You kind of try and squeeze a few actions into one sentence that could have probably been broken up. Instead, it's hard for the reader to follow the exactions clearly and just translates to "Turel did some things"
If you're guying to refer to attributes of random goon #1, describe him first hand. Otherwise, there is no real context to him grabbing him by the "flaxen" hair. Or if anything just say "Grabbing him by the hair" since we assume, that random goon #1 has hair, but we don't really need to know detail unless it's something clear like he was wearing a pony tail and Celevon tugged at that. Combined with the elbow-move, it just clouds the rest of the action.
(I'm only nitpicking here because the rest of the post is solid)
one of the other thugs -- you're describing a group-fight and need to be clear about distinguishing between different "thugs".