A sharp smell of ozone tinged the air as lightning leapt from the outstretched hand of Kamjin Lap’lamiz. A veritable storm shot forth towards his opponent, electricity arcing throughout the air.
Purple streaks slammed into a quartet of ice blue blades. The plasma weaponry intercepted the bolts, grounding the electricity before it harmed the wielder behind them. But the legendary blades did little to halt the impact behind the electricity.
The Serpentine figured was forced backward from the strength of the assault. His tail carved a small trench in the ground and gravel of the island; Hector Von Ricmore grimaced at the discomfort of such a sensation on his tail, even armored as it was. Plasteel was worn down and torn as he fought to stay upright against the deluge of sparks which split the sky.
Finally the barrage ceased. Not a hint of exertion showed on Kamjin’s face. The Sith had seemingly summoned a storm with the same amount of effort as someone going about their day. If it were not for the battle hungry look upon his face, Hector would hardly assume that the battle had affected his foe at all.
How utterly terrifying.
Yet despite the direness of the situation, the Thisspiassian could not help the exhilarating feeling which ran through him. There was something about fighting the strongest the galaxy had to offer. Something that made him feel alive.
Thrill or no thrill, it was obvious that he wouldn’t win this at range. Not against someone of this caliber. He had to close the distance quickly.
While nowhere near his preferred tactic, Hector did have an option. The energy of the Living Force pulsed through his body, gathering in his tail. He practically pushed off the ground, darting towards his foe at speed quick enough to appear as a blur.
Stones and boulders tore themselves from the ground, wrenched into the air by Kamjin’s mystical might. The Human hurled the stones at his rapidly approaching foe, one rock after another.
Four arctic blue blades swung at incredible speeds. They cut through the rocks before the boulders impacted, cutting and burning them into smaller pieces. Most of these flew by harmlessly; but nature would not be denied. Handfuls of rock shrapnel impacted the serpent, tearing and gouging chunks from the plastoid armor.
Pushing through the impacts he closed the gap. Four lightsabers rose up to strike down his foe.
”You will toss away your lightsabers.”
What? Why would he want to do such a thing?
”YOU WILL TOSS AWAY YOUR LIGHTSABERS.”
The presence boomed inside his skull. Body moving on autopilot, entirely unwillingly, the Serpent allowed the weapons to fall from his grasp. The hilts impacted the ground. Blades flickered out. The cylinders rolled for several seconds before coming to a stop on the rocky ground.
”YOU WILL SIT THERE AND WAIT.”
No, no, no, no. Not like this. Not like this.
Kamjin leisurely strolled towards his enemy. This had been an enjoyable opportunity, a good excuse to cut loose. To indulge himself.
“How does it feel to be held within my power Ricmore? The power of the Dark Side of the Force? Even with four blades, you were never a match for me. But that’s not surprising. Not from someone as pathetic as you.”
Hector Von Ricmore mentally thrashed and struggled against the unseen energy that manipulated his movements. He had bested Scimitar. Survived Anders. He couldn’t die like this. Frozen, unable to fight back.
He needed to move. He needed to move. He needed to move.
Crimson light slowly descended in an agonizing swing. A single finger moved tapping a button on Hector’s left gauntlet.
Fire roared out of the rebreather pack atop his back, hurtling him towards his foe.
Hector slammed bodily into Kamjin, knocking the human to the ground.
There was no elegance in what came next. Just savagery and a desperate desire to survive.
The impact freed the Serpent of the energy which bound him. His top arms curled around Kamjin’s throat while the bottom arms landed blow after blow into the human’s chest.
Kamjin thrashed and kicked, impacting his foe for every blow he took.
But Hector held on. He wanted to live. He wanted to live.
Hector felt cold. So very cold. Yellow eyes stared into eyes burned Crimson from channeling the Dark Side.
Then all he knew was pain.
Lighting erupted across his body. Kamjin grappled the Serpent, holding onto despite the erratic movements. Hector seized rapidly, the purple lightning ravaged his body. His mouth contorted into a silent scream, nerves unable to send the signal that he should be howling.
And then his struggles fell silent. The serpent fell unmoving to the rocky floor.
The Dark Side practically purred at the conflict and death. Kamjin had achieved what he sought. An outlet for release.
I'm enjoying the strong descriptive language here in the beginning. The transition of internal monologue to confrontation was smooth and there's clarity in the combative descriptions. I could only constructively comment on subjective placement of commas and run-on sentencing.