Takadona Forest, 34 ABY
In the dark of Takadona’s forest landscape there was a single pinpoint of light. Abadeer Taasii
looked down at his wrist where his holo communicator rested. There was a projection of a map with several different blips moving about a single red blip. Taasii covered the communicator in its case and glanced out into the dense forest. In the dark of the night the Togruta relied more on his echolocation than sight, but he could still see his immediate surroundings. The craggy cliff he’d perched himself on overlooked a small lake, the entire of which was encircled by dense jungle.
While fairly temperate, the was a crisp evening wind that the Sith made sure he was not downwind of the site of his target. Beyond his normal vision, or even echolocation there was a destroyed compound. It had one tower that was still relatively intact, but the rest was now scattered debris. Abadeer’s Battleteam was moving into position around the ruined building that had apparently used to be a castle, used as a safe haven for various pirate groups.
In his ear the Togruta heard a short beep go off before a voice came out of the tiny earpiece.
“Master, Nash and I have made it to the designated point. Orders?” It was Taasii’s new apprentice, Arsolimes. The newly-knighted Shadow pondered for a moment before responding.
“I don’t think it’s wise for the entire team to move in. Stay behind as back up. We’re not sure why Arron is here, but we need to capture him alive. He’s dangerous, and could be a problem for you Journeymen.” There was a low murmuring of protest over the headset. “That’s an order!” Abadeer barked, “Just stay ready for backup and extraction. He’ll have the information we need.”
As he finished his orders, the Sith took out his earpiece, not desiring any distractions in the coming conflict. Facing another Knight would take all of his concentration and skills. Taasii picked himself off the ground and rubbed his face, thinking back to the orders he’d been given.
KSD Trascendent, 34 ABY
The thin Pantoran sitting across the desk from Abadeer was seemingly ignoring the impatient Sith. After what seemed like an eternity, Laren Uscot looked up from his notes at the obviously irritated Togruta.
“After the feud with Odan Urr, we’ve lost track on some of our communication and spy networks. We need those repaired as soon as possible. The Apostles will be sent on many missions in the coming months. Especially those involving other Clans. We need to know their whereabouts, what they’re doing and why.” Laren was staring directly at Taasii with a furrowed brow, trying to gauge a reaction. “If you’re ready, we’ve received some intelligence that a Cathar Knight from Palatinae has been sent to various sites in the Outer Rim to track the First Order after their most recent attacks on the Republic. Go find him, and bring him back alive. We need to know anything about what he found on the Order, as well as some questions I have for him about Palatinae.”
Takadona, 34 ABY
Still rubbing his weary eyes Abadeer looked out over the calm forest. He needed to prepare and focus. The Togruta stretched his stiff muscles before dropping himself from the cliff he’d chosen as his vantage point. Landing some meters below, the Sith rose preparing to stalk his prey. Taasii’s dark, horned frame disappeared into the jungle as he stalked towards the ruins, and his quarry.
Maz Kanata’s Castle, Takadona, 34 ABY
Arron lifted himself from his knees. This must have been quite the palace Arron mused, glancing at the rubble of the ruined castle. Saylos had been what felt like a goose chase for the past several weeks. He’d been trying to track the whereabouts of various First Order leaders. Everytime he received any kind of information, he seemed to be two steps behind, with nothing to show for his efforts. In the past few days though, there was something that caused the Cathar to be a bit more cautious than he had been. Nothing tangible, but just a feeling like he’d been followed. After arriving on Takadona, the eerie feeling couldn’t be shaken. His metallic hand felt the the lightsaber at his side, allowing him some comfort in the familiarity of the weapon.
As the Cathar dusted of his trousers, he felt a shift in the wind that caused the fur on the back of his neck to stand on end. I’m not alone. Glowing green eyes darted around at the rubble, and surrounding forest around him. A slight bit of movement nearly startled the Cathar, before he realized that it was merely a tattered and desolate banner. Arron crouched low trying to pick out anything moving towards himself. There wasn’t a single sign of anything visually, but the Knight knew he’d definitely smelled someone nearby. The Palatinae once again slowly reached down to his belt, hearing the low clink of metal on metal, he grasped the hilt tightly, and drew it from its place on his waist. With a low hum the violet blade was suddenly let loose into the air.
The Cathar held his saber aloft to aid in his search for any approaching figures. In almost frantic desperation, Saylos turned every which way, eyes searching the darkness for anything. After several minutes of panicked searching, he tried to calm himself down, taking deep breaths. Arron deactivated his blade, and closed his eyes to reach out with the Force, to see if he could sense anything. As soon as he began to focus on his surroundings, the Knight knew that he was in immediate danger. Only a few feet away, a tall figure materialized seemingly out of nothingness, with a fist raised high in the air. The Togruta brought his clenched fist down hard, right into the ground at their feet. Ar roaring shockwave exploded out from ground as his fist connected with the earth. The Cathar went flying several meters to fall in a crumpled heap.
Abadeer rose slowly from the epicenter of the blast radius. Glancing about he saw most of the
rubble had been forced back from his presence, all save for the biggest pieces of the fallen walls. Amber eyes glowing like molten durasteel came to rest on the prone Cathar. This was indeed the Plagueain’s target, distinguished by the midnight hue of fur. Your imprisonment with my Apostles will not be pleasant, Taasii thought to himself as he strode slowly to his quarry. Only feet away from Arron now, the Togruta began to kneel down, when a soft itch in the back of his head told him to get away. Abadeer jumped back from Saylos with only moments to spare, as the Cathar’s violet blade lashed out right where his neck had been.
The Cathar fluidly rolled back onto his shoulders and with a powerful kick from both legs, maneuvered himself back into position ready for the coming bout. Abadeer sighed, knowing that knocking the Dark Jedi off his feet wouldn’t be enough to take him out. It had been too easy.The Battleteam Leader reached behind him where his own lightsaber rested horizontally under his lower back, and brought it to bare, barrel directed straight at the Palatinae. Abadeer activated the leveled blade and watched as Arron watched the violent hum of magenta energy beam straight towards his face.
“Come quietly, for your own good. I don’t want to kill you. We just need some information from you.” Abadeer’s low, deep voice echoed in the darkness of the ruins. In response, Arron scoffed loudly.
“I’ll not be doing that. I’ll never be a prisoner to anyone ever again!” The declaration was emphasized with Saylos’s assault, which nearly caught the Togruta off guard, as he watched the Cathar rush at him with all his might. With only a few meters between him and his opponent, the Cathar leapt quickly to the side onto a larger piece of debris to perform an acrobatic flying strike on the stationary Sith. As the lightsaber sliced through the air and came to a crash on the ground, Arron glanced up to Abadeer. Taasii had neatly bounded just out of distance of the strike as was now effortlessly holding his deadly blade at the face of Saylos.
“I don’t think you’ll find that you’ll have a choice in the matter, you flee-bitten furball."
Syntax:
I think you meant 'upwind' here.
Mark thoughts with italics.
Story:
You clearly established the setting and motivations for both characters, which is always nice to see in an opening post.
I also like that you made the effort to make this more stylistically distinctive than the average ACC post. If anything, you might have been a little too ambitious: in just under 1500 words, you change setting three times, time once, and POV once as well. That's a lot of stuff going on, and while I wouldn't necessarily cut any of it, it does break up the flow a bit for my liking. I would either expand that third chunk ("Still rubbing...") a bit, or simply fade from the flashback to Arron without stopping for a short paragraph about Abadeer.
While they're relatively popular for non-humans, we don't see all that many Togruta or Cathar running around. Little details like Abadeer's reliance on echolocation over sight or Arron's fur standing on end are nice moments that really take advantage of the different species.
Realism:
Arron is probably a little more agile than I'd expect from +1 Athletics, but it doesn't affect the narrative and you did a good job writing Sokan, so I'm definitely not dinging you for this. No errors found.
Continuity:
No errors found.