They called it a den. That was how Club Vertica was so often described by patrons and outsiders alike. It had an unmistakable allure that attracted those with a craving for high stakes and the rush that came with it. Such a thing was hard to describe to those who had never felt it, and Kazdan Chin had given up trying long ago. No stim could compare to the high of endorphins that could only be felt when the favor of fate lay with the risks more than the rewards. That was the driving force behind the diminutive looking man, with his shaggy brown hair framing a gaunt facial features, and his eventual path as a mercenary in the employ of the Sentinel Network.
His sunken blue eyes were mesmerising when set against his skin's olive hue — a fact he knew and relied upon — while his red and grey jacket disguised his skinny frame. He pulled absentmindedly at the collar of his shirt with his left hand while his gaze burned holes through the pale cerulean liquid swirling in the stout glass in front of him. Kazdan could feel the familiar weight of his blaster in its holster upon his hip, but it lacked its usual reassuring quality. Still, the merc felt the buzz of activity behind him as he sat in the alcove of the bar. The games of sabacc were in full swing and the band had just shifted into their next equally upbeat and obnoxious set of medleys. Yet with all the cacophony generated within Vertica, the silence offered by the man seated beside Kazdan managed to be deafening.
The Sentinel operative's body tensed as the man reached out and passed a credit chip to the bartender. The hand was deathly pale when contrasted against the burns etched through the man's flesh and the black, ribbon-like cloak that fell in layers around him. Kazdan knew there wasn't a logical reason for how jumpy he had become since the man arrived. There was a notable calm about the other man that should have had the merc more at ease, and yet there was something in the subtle recognition that shone for but a moment in the man's grey-gold eyes that told Kazdan he had become a target.
Meanwhile, Atra Ventus remained focused on his mission. He had not come to Club Vertica for the ambiance. In fact, any trail that took the Umbaran Grand Inquisitor to Nar Shaddaa was always met with a concentrated power of will on his part. He resisted the urge to rub his temples as the bright illumination bit at his sensitive optic nerves with fiery determination. Thanks be to small miracles, Atra thought as he focused on the relative shade of the bar itself. The bartender returned with his drink in short order, a mirror to the one that had been placed in front of Kazdan. The Umbaran's nostrils flared as the smell of liquor hit him and betrayed the sheer numbing strength of the drink. Thankfully, he had no intention of drinking it to begin with. It was merely an excuse to keep away from the better illuminated tables filling the club proper.
"Unless you intend on adding a new skylight to Vertica," Atra said with a slightly lilting accent, "you should take a sip before you jump out of your skin."
Jumping was exactly what Kazdan did in response to the suddenly broken silence between them. In fact, he nearly toppled his drink as his hands spasmed around it. It would have been amusing to Atra if it wasn't so pitiful at the same time. "I presume you are Kazdan Chin, then?" he continued with his eerily calm voice, loud enough to be heard over the noise of the club.
"De—" the merc tripped over his own tongue before steeling himself, "depends on who wants to know."
"A prospective employer."
Atra turned his head to claim eye contact with Kazdan as he replied. He had waited far too patiently to allow the potential opportunity to slip through his fingers. The Grand Inquisitor had done his homework well. While the members of the Inquisitorius so often worked alone, or in small units, the Umbaran had a notable advantage that worked in his favor. He was Praetor to the Voice of the Brotherhood, and privy to the resources such a position afforded him. It was those resources — the operatives within his sphere of influence — that Atra had relied upon to forge the complex web of connections that pointed towards this singular man.
It had been a series of coincidental meetings surrounding suspected Resistance activities, too many to trust to chance. Ship logs, transaction records, holo-recorders, and eyewitness reports all culminated in one man: Kazdan Chin. The conflict between the Jedi of Odan-Urr and the Brotherhood's forces had become a game of hide and seek since the destruction of New Tython. It had taken far longer than it reasonably should have to start finding cracks in the enemy's veil of secrecy, and the matter was far too important to leave for others. It was this need for success that had set the man second only to Evant — the Voice himself — on a collision course with Kazdan.
"Now that's a shame," the mercenary replied. "I happen to be exclusively employed for the time being, mate."
Clearly the idea that Atra was merely coming to him with a job had eased much of Kazdan's previous nervousness. It was quite the tightrope the man was walking, and Atra was sure the Odanites had at least the decency to be upfront about the risks involved. Working against a shadow organization would make anyone jumpy. Now that he had settled, Kazdan sunk into his chair and the Praetor thought there was a slight drawl to his words but had difficulty making it out over the band's latest tune.
"All I need is information," the Praetor remarked. He produced another credit chip from beneath his cloak and gave it a twirl before placing it between them. "About that employer of yours."
"Exclusivity comes with privacy, pal."
Atra nodded, having expected as much. For so many, loyalty always had a price point, but so did betrayal — you just needed the right currency. His focus turned inward, sifting through himself until he felt his connection to the Force within his mental grasp. He felt the distinct flavor of the Light, warm and soothing... and a lie. The Praetor dropped the concealment that had become all but second nature to him, feeling the Dark's embrace once more. The sensation was both hot and cold in equal parts and it washed over him greedily. Then his focus shifted once more, pushing that power outward.
Kazdan felt a tightening in his chest, the first unconscious response to the unseen tendrils slithering into the cracks between his thoughts and taking root deep within him. His pulse quickened and so did his breathing. Emotions welled within his mind; dark and primal in nature, they pushed against his reason. Even the din of Club Vertica seemed to fade into the background as Kazdan's body turned against him. Sweat beaded along the merc's furrowed brow as he fought the unbridled fear that sought to claim him, panic setting in as he teetered on the edge of failure.
Then it was gone.
Relief washed over Kazdan and filled the void left in the wake of his previous looming terror. He swallowed hard and composed himself once more before shifting his gaze to Atra, who was still staring at him intently. Could he have... no, the merc thought to himself before shaking it off. It had been a panic attack, nothing more. Live with risk long enough and they'd catch up to you eventually. "Now," Atra began again as he placed another credit chip on the counter, "I don't take you for a deviant, so we'll assume you didn't particularly enjoy that."
Kazdan swallowed hard, his previous suspicions suddenly being realized even after he had dismissed them. "What—"
"Tell me everything you know about this Sentinel Network," Atra interrupted.
Again, Kazdan swallowed and looked at his drink. His jaw worked back and forth while his mind weighed his options. The merc turned back to Atra and—BANG! The first shot scorched the counter and sent the credit chips there scattering deeper into the alcove. Another shot rang out, penetrating the glass pane of the windows lining the walls across the club from the bar. Now, while it wasn't uncommon for disputes in Vertica to end with blaster fire, sniper fire was an altogether different situation. The band ceased playing, but the noise within the club didn't lesson and was instead replaced by cries of panic and surprise as the crowd sought to either pinpoint the source of the attacker or find cover.
A series of shots fell in a line between the mercenary and the Inquisitor, leaving Kazdan to take advantage of the ensuing chaos by diving to the side and away from Atra. The Praetor exhaled hard through his nose and pushed away from the bar, rising to his full height as he turned to follow Kazdan. Another cascade of fire from the sniper forced the Praetor to hold his position, but not without suddenly being knocked back against the counter as someone pushed past.
Atra was already reaching for the saber hanging from his belt, his fingers wrapping around it, as he turned to locate his target once more. The sniper took that moment to shoot the glasses still sitting upon the counter which forced Atra to shield his face from the shards with his arm. He allowed himself another long exhale as he centered himself against the rage growing within him. Atra blinked several times after lowering his arm, having to adjust to the bright room once more, and found Kazdan standing calmly across from him. The Praetor shifted his gaze to the broken window and waited for more shots to come from wherever the sniper was perched, but none appeared.
"Friend of yours?" the Umbaran asked with a minor head nod towards the window.
"Something like that," Kazdan replied. The merc then shifted his weight. "Before this gets ugly, how 'bout we just go our separate ways?"
Atra's visage remained expressionless while his eyes glanced over the mercenary. There was something off about the situation that just didn't feel right, a peculiarity that didn't fit with everything else. "The alternative being?"
"I'd think that obvious," Kazdan replied with a shrug and an obvious air of confidence.
A confidence that was at odds with what Atra had seen in the man he had been targeting, and all traces of the merc's drawl were gone as well. The Praetor's left arm, covered with black fabric and a metallic bracer, rose from beneath his layered robe and tensed suddenly, forcibly cracking his own knuckles as he clenched his fingers. "Where is Kazdan, and who are you?" Atra responded dryly.
A half-grin spread on fake-Kazdan's face followed by a soft chuckle. "Should have figured this wouldn't work, but hey... one could hope," he said.
One instant, Atra was staring at an exact replica of the man he had been speaking to moments before, and in the blink of an eye he became someone else. The Praetor cursed inwardly, a mild flare of frustration at being tricked even for an instant. Atra had expected to see Kazdan, and that was what had allowed the newcomer an anchor to tailor his illusion around. A simple mistake to make and one the Inquisitor couldn't afford.
He took the opportunity to examine his opponent, making note of as much as he could. From the undercut hair style with a wolf tail in the back, to the stubble on his face, and even the bright green eyes that had a mixture of confidence and time-worn weariness, Atra was able to piece together exactly who he was facing. The leader of the Sentinel Network himself: Turel Sorenn. As Proconsul of Clan Odan-Urr, that much information the Inquisitorius had been able to piece together before the Jedi went off the grid.
"Kazdan isn't picking up right now, but feel free to leave a message, Inquisitor," Turel stated confidently before raising an eyebrow. "Or do you prefer Atra?"
The Praetor's eyes narrowed slightly, making note that the enemy had more information than he was altogether comfortable with, but it was to be expected at least. “I’d prefer if you just surrendered, actually,” Atra responded sarcastically. “They say there’s always a bigger fish. Looks like Kazdan just landed me one.”
Atra freed his saber from the hip and toggled its switch. The blade snapped to life with a hiss and a crackle as energy worked like sparks along its white length.
“Yeah, that’s… not going to happen,” the Proconsul said.
“Shall I drop him?” Echo-3’s voice crackled through Turel’s commlink. His reply came with a slight gesture of his hand, raising a finger within view of the sniper’s scope. As assets go, she was always reliable when Turel needed her to be.
“You’re not the only one with friends,” Atra stated with a noticeable smirk tugging at the corner of his lips. “Do it, Adalinde.”
“Finally,” the woman responded in Atra’s earpiece. The woman — his companion on most missions — had gained access to the club's power grid as a precaution before Atra had taken his first steps within. A sudden surge through the electrical circuitry caused the bright lights inside Club Vertica to flare for an instant before sputtering out in a shower of sparks, leaving only the light of the Vertical City itself shining through the windows and the pale, dancing glow of the Praetor’s weapon. He had closed his eyes protectively and stalked forward in response to his own command and found himself face to face with Turel in the sudden darkness.
He swung his arm up from its lazy stance at his side, a whisper in the Force allowing him to intercept a shot from Echo-3 before turning the momentum into a full cleave at the Jedi. Turel responded with a cool head and gripped his own lightsaber firmly. The lavender blade came to life and pushed Atra’s weapon away from its lethal arc.
The much shorter man settled into a defensive posture, keeping his muscles tense and ready for the attacks he knew would come. He took two steps back in an attempt to provide Echo-3 with a better firing solution, but Atra used his leg span to his advantage and kept close as Turel retreated. The Praetor took a probing stab at the other man’s defenses that was easily parried, then pivoted with a horizontal slash aimed at Turel’s midsection.
The Proconsul didn’t disappoint and managed to bounce the slash up and away from him with a countering slash. Atra smiled internally, enjoying the exchange while making note of the obviously defensive nature of Turel’s style. That could work to his advantage over time, so long as the Inquisitor managed to maintain his own stamina and overpower the Jedi.
“Huh, smart play,” Turel noted with a cocksure grin that elicited a slight curious tilt of Atra’s head. “Our positioning,” he continued while pointing over his shoulder with his thumb.
The Praetor sighed slightly and shifted his single-handed grip on his saber’s hilt. It had been the practical course of action: putting Turel between himself and the sniper. One less thing to worry about until he could figure out a better plan of attack. Atra should have expected the other man to pick up on it, but it confirmed at least one thing for him. This battle would be decided by the mind as much as the body.
Syntax:
You either need to make 'risk' plural or 'they'd' singular.
This results in a longer sentence, but you had a sentence fragment in here before.
Awkwardly phrased. Are you referring to the description? The fact that he's Proconsul? Both of which, I think, would have been relatively common knowledge throughout the Brotherhood after the GM Invitational and his other shenanigans.
Story:
This was a nice set-up, and what I've come to expect from an Atra post.
My only complaint is that, in a post of 2,638 words, that was the only attention to what happens in a crowded bar when gunfire starts up. I think you sufficiently explained what happened - people freaked out and ran - but this would have been a good place for detail. Additionally, from a metagaming perspective, you left the door open for Turel to make use of bystanders caught huddling in the dark. I don't know if that was or wasn't your intention.
Realism:
No errors that I spotted.
Continuity:
No errors.