The sheer pain in his knee was a wakeup call to Mactire. This was an opponent that was tenacious, and emotionally unstable. Maybe with any luck he could turn this around. The human slowly stretched out his bad knee, pulling out his blaster while trying to stabilize himself.
“You never know when to call it quits, do you kid?” Aexod said, slowly turning to face Chemel, his white lightsaber casting an eerie glow upon his skin.
“Quitting is just something I can’t do yet.” Mactire aimed slowly down the barrel and fired off several shots at the Zabrak
Aexod grinned in anticipation, slowly watching the Human’s trigger finger depressing the trigger.Drawing upon the Force, his blade whirled into life, bocking the volley of lasers that came towards him. His temper rose and he charged wildly towards Mactire. Anyone that was starting to get the room back together hid behind anything they could quickly find once they caught the intense look of malice and hatred in Aexod’s eyes.
Watching the Zabrak in motion with his lightsaber gave Chemel a plan that just might work. With all his willpower, he focused on an image of himself, and positioned it slightly in front of himself. Wincing in pain, Mactire moved slightly to the left behind a broken table and directed his blaster out towards where he placed his his illusion.
As Aexod advanced, the onlookers watched, making sure they were out of harm’s way. The Zabrak stood over Mactire, smirking in victory and wondering what to do and how to end his life. Kneeling down slightly, Aexod grabbed Chemel’s hair and pulled his head up to look him in the eyes.
“How do you want to die, punk? Slow and painful, or quick and fast? Me, I prefer to make your suffering last a long, long time.” Aexod implied with acid in his tone.
Wincing in pain Mactire smiled slightly. “Only a fool gets this close to me, and those fools are all dead.”
Mactire looked at Aexod and spits at him, laughing. As Chemel tried to move, Aexod’s blade came crashing down, cleaving his head.
Aexod grinned, “That ended things for you, punk.” he whirled around to face the man who started it all.
Two shots rang out from behind a table, hitting Aexod in both knees and sent him sprawling to the ground. A figure hobbled out towards him slowly. Shock appears across the Zabrak’s face. Aexod could have sworn he just killed this man, how was it possible that he was walking towards him now?
Mactire smirked, placing another shot into Aexod’s hand that supported him. The wound made him onto his side in pain.
“YOU NERF HERDER! HOW DID YOU SURVIVE? I KILLED YOU?!” The Iridonian exclaimed, the sheer agony of the blaster burns causing him to panic.
Mactire pulled up a chair and sat down on it, an enigmatic, yet confident smile plastered over his face. “It was a good fight. You lost your head and got cocky, prized student. The Force was with me this round. Next time I might not be so lucky.”
Mactire slowly stood up and hobbled out the antechamber towards a med bay, his meeting with the crime lord forgotten for now.
“Don’t worry. When I get to the medic, I’ll make sure they send someone for you… I’ll also tell them to heavily sedate you so that I can get away until you calm down.” Mactire joked.
Aexod looked at the back of the human in total disbelief, he could not fathom that an opponent would do this to him. Humiliated by someone who had tainted the Iridonian’s martial art, who had gotten the drop on him. The pain radiating through the Zabrak’s hand and knees finally took its toll and Aexod passed out right as medical personnel were rushing towards him.
The kid was tough, and he did keep his word. Maybe I won’t kill him yet, maybe I’ll see what he’s made of.
Interesting start to the story..! I enjoyed the “it’s a bet, triple or nothing” scenario that you used to introduce the fight sequence. However, I think some banter between Mactire and the Zabrak could have helped us “transition” between the two scenes (going lounging around and relaxing and the actual start of the fight) instead of just “attacking him first before he can get near you” sort of idea. Just food for thought, but it was a very creative and interesting way to introduce the fight. Well done!
You also use three different terms for your opponent: Zabrak, Aexod, and Ragnosian. It can get rather confusing if you keep changing the terms… Two at most (like you do for your own character Mactire / The Acolyte).
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